Walking through these sweet scented leaves
I know autumn has come.
A solitary bird
Sings somewhere in the cool air.
While outside these sheltering trees
Civilisation goes on
And a few solitary birds
Sing their song
Of empires long since gone.
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K Morris - Poet 
I like this very much.
Thank you Liz. I wasn’t sure whether the stanza breaks work. I always appreciate your comments.
You’re welcome, Kevin. The poem might not read as smoothly as you would like because putting a period after “cool air” makes the second stanza a sentence fragment. To make the poem read a bit more smoothly, you could either replace the period with a comma and get rid of the stanza break or keep the period after “cool air,” keep the stanza break, and delete “While” to make the second stanza a complete sentence.
Thanks for your helpful feedback, Liz. I shall think about how to proceed.
You’re welcome, Kevin.
Lovely poem, Kevin.
Thank you, Vivienne. I’m pleased you like it.