They couldn’t stay long.
A remembrance of hands
And an abandoned hairband,
Kept for a while,
Brings a sad smile
To a man’s ageing face
At a girl’s lost grace.
They couldn’t stay long.
A remembrance of hands
And an abandoned hairband,
Kept for a while,
Brings a sad smile
To a man’s ageing face
At a girl’s lost grace.
So poignant . . .
Thank you, Liz. In retrospect, I wonder whether losing the first line would cause the poem to read better.
You’re welcome, Kevin. I agree that losing the first line would make the poem scan better.
Thanks for your feedback, Liz. Its really helpful and confirms my own view of the matter.
My pleasure, Kevin!
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Thanks for the share, Michael.
Indeed very poignant. Thanks for sharing, Kevin! Enjoy a beautiful weekend! xx Michael
Thanks, Michael. I’m pleased you like my poem. You also, have a great weekend. Kevin